This month I actually accomplished my objective of writing at least 3 times a week. The juices began to flow. I would even think about re-writing falling asleep or waking up. Felt good to be focused again.
My writing coach wanted me to concentrate on nine issues. A major one involved avoiding POV (point of view) stranglehold. This bad habit takes the narrator out of the story. The reader only sees events and scenes from the point of view of the main character.
POV stranglehold example: With hands on her hips, Susan felt the pressure of her feet pushing against the dirt. As Sam drove away the smell of dust filled her nostrils. She wondered why he became so angry.
In the above example the narrator is absent. The reader sees everything though Susan’s eyes (her POV).
The narrator establishing the scene: Slamming the door of his pickup truck, Sam drove off. A cloud of dust kicked up by the tires trailed behind him. Standing with her hands on her hips, Susan wondered, “What’s up with him?”
The difference appears subtle, but the imagery becomes more engaging when the narrator is involved. As I wrote this month, my “aha moment” came when my narrator became more assertive.